• I am able to see your wordpress page and it looks good. My suggestion is that you order the menu tabs correctly (see annefwalker.worpress.com as a model)
• I am not able to see your in-class diagnostic
• I am able to see your revised diagnostic
• I have read your revised diagnostic and find it to be, on the AWPE 1 through 6 scale:
o A 3 paper is unsatisfactory in one or more of the following ways. It may respond to the text illogically; it may lack coherent structure or elaboration with examples; it may reflect an incomplete understanding of the text or the topic. Its prose is usually characterized by at least one of the following: frequently imprecise word choice; little sentence variety; occasional major errors in grammar and usage, or frequent minor errors
o I suggest:
• that you consider taking WRI 11 for additional help with this class
• Do note that all wordpress pages are public unless you make it private. If you choose to make it private, do make sure that I am still able to access it
If you would like further comments please do find me during office hours.
I suggest you to read the entirety of In Cold Blood before we are scheduled to complete it in class. This suggestion is so that you can start writing into your essay with enough time to go through several edits on the completed paper.
I look forward to working with you through this semester.
This third written response will consider your third essay and your progress through the semester, noting areas on which you might focus as you complete your final portfolio.
Portfolio:
• I see that drafts of all of your cover letters, and of your introduction, are not yet uploaded
• I see that you still need to upload evidence
o and at this time have some of it up
• for visual clarity
o include links (to those on whose work you replied) in your collaboration section
o create the correct order for your menu. Look to http://annefwalker.wordpress.com/ for the correct order
• additionally
o it is a good idea to upload sooner rather than later. That way you can troubleshoot for problems well before the deadline
Essay 3:
• this response will focus primarily on clarity of writing as these tips will be of most help for you as you complete editing your cover letters and essay 4
o keep working on creating clear sentence structure by being attentive to reducing redundancy and increasing specificity. As you revise for one syntactic element, you will notice other revisions come to mind that will help you to make your sentences clearer
o one way to work toward clearer syntax is to double check that you have explained your ideas before moving on to the next thought. When you do this more, you will be filling up the space you create from reducing redundancies.
o to clarify your writing and thinking, keep working with the paramedic method: http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/635/01/
o you needed to quote and cite the film as well as this book
o your last two essays show significant improvement! Good work!
• Grade: B+/A-
As always, if you would like more feedback please do seek me out in office hours. You have done a good job through this semester! Keep the energy going, we are almost there!
goingindepth 
Jan 30, 2012 @ 07:25:40
Hi Lyubov,
Good work so far in this semester:
• I am able to see your wordpress page and it looks good. My suggestion is that you order the menu tabs correctly (see annefwalker.worpress.com as a model)
• I am not able to see your in-class diagnostic
• I am able to see your revised diagnostic
• I have read your revised diagnostic and find it to be, on the AWPE 1 through 6 scale:
o A 3 paper is unsatisfactory in one or more of the following ways. It may respond to the text illogically; it may lack coherent structure or elaboration with examples; it may reflect an incomplete understanding of the text or the topic. Its prose is usually characterized by at least one of the following: frequently imprecise word choice; little sentence variety; occasional major errors in grammar and usage, or frequent minor errors
o I suggest:
• that you consider taking WRI 11 for additional help with this class
• Do note that all wordpress pages are public unless you make it private. If you choose to make it private, do make sure that I am still able to access it
If you would like further comments please do find me during office hours.
I have uploaded the prompt for essay one. We will discuss it, and start work on it, in class this week. The prompt is at both http://annefwalker.wordpress.com and http://annefwalker.wordpress.com/about/. The page http://annefwalker.wordpress.com/about/ is where I will archive all uploaded documents for this class, including the AWPE scoring guide which I used in assessing your diagnostic. The page http://annefwalker.wordpress.com will focus on the most current-use documents, including a weekly lesson plan including homework.
I suggest you to read the entirety of In Cold Blood before we are scheduled to complete it in class. This suggestion is so that you can start writing into your essay with enough time to go through several edits on the completed paper.
I look forward to working with you through this semester.
Cheers,
Anne
Apr 02, 2012 @ 04:46:49
Please load your final essay in pdf format in your craft section.
Apr 25, 2012 @ 21:03:43
This third written response will consider your third essay and your progress through the semester, noting areas on which you might focus as you complete your final portfolio.
Portfolio:
• I see that drafts of all of your cover letters, and of your introduction, are not yet uploaded
• I see that you still need to upload evidence
o and at this time have some of it up
• for visual clarity
o include links (to those on whose work you replied) in your collaboration section
o create the correct order for your menu. Look to http://annefwalker.wordpress.com/ for the correct order
• additionally
o it is a good idea to upload sooner rather than later. That way you can troubleshoot for problems well before the deadline
Essay 3:
• this response will focus primarily on clarity of writing as these tips will be of most help for you as you complete editing your cover letters and essay 4
o keep working on creating clear sentence structure by being attentive to reducing redundancy and increasing specificity. As you revise for one syntactic element, you will notice other revisions come to mind that will help you to make your sentences clearer
o one way to work toward clearer syntax is to double check that you have explained your ideas before moving on to the next thought. When you do this more, you will be filling up the space you create from reducing redundancies.
o to clarify your writing and thinking, keep working with the paramedic method: http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/635/01/
o you needed to quote and cite the film as well as this book
o your last two essays show significant improvement! Good work!
• Grade: B+/A-
As always, if you would like more feedback please do seek me out in office hours. You have done a good job through this semester! Keep the energy going, we are almost there!
Cheers,
Anne